Gradually i fall asleep

Poem by: Da-emise

Reads: 1988 | Likes: 3 | Shelves: 0 | Comments: 35

A romantic poem......

It's been week since,I saw you last.

It's been week since my phone blinked your name.

It's a beautiful night dear.

I just wish you were here.

I wish I could praise the moon,with you beside me

I wish I could explore you.

I wish I could caress you right under the moon,

And feel privileged,I found you.

I'm still thinking when I hear the window crack,

And as I turn,I can feel on my maw,your hand.

Then as your arms pull me closer,and your solicitous embrace harbour my little self,

I can hear your heart beat,"you're mine",it says....

This love has forced my lashes wet,down to my cheeks

And as you gather that,"Shh",I hear you speak..

And there in your arms,

Gradually I fall asleep...

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Submitted: February 09, 2015

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Ever A. Darling

Aweeee! I love this. In the beginning, I was expecting more of a poem about how this person is remember their loved one...but then their loved one comes through the window and just, GAH! It was amazing c: I love the ending because it was happy, and just this whole poem kept me entwined within it's grasp. Definitely unique, and beautiful (: thank you so much for entering in my contest, darling. Results will be up within a week after Valentine's Day

Mon, February 9th, 2015 5:59pm

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Thankyou so so so much.... this comment means a lot....and I'm too excited about the contest....and Valentine's. Day... :) :)

Mon, February 9th, 2015 10:41am

APurpleHeart

So romantic! Not many people can pull off a great romance poem. I read it and it sounded just like a romance story. Love it! A like!

Mon, February 9th, 2015 6:36pm

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Thank-you so much dear... :)

Mon, February 9th, 2015 10:38am

APurpleHeart

So romantic! Not many people can pull off a great romance poem. I read it and it sounded just like a romance story. Love it! A like!

Mon, February 9th, 2015 6:36pm

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Umm...thanks again: p

Mon, February 9th, 2015 9:53pm

natalayaevans

That was wonderful. Sneaky love??? Old school window trick... You just made it better and more desirable. Loved it. The way you described the missing part and then suddenly he appears!!! Gosh that just got me grinning like the Cheshire cat. Lovely and truly romantic...

Tue, February 10th, 2015 5:07am

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Thankyou so much.....im glad you liked it.....imaginig through was better than writing though; )

Mon, February 9th, 2015 9:18pm

myheavenmyworld

Hey! Dear this is really a wonderful, romantic, emotional and at the same time fabulous too. I loved and liked it so much.....Keep Writing.....

Tue, February 10th, 2015 4:16pm

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Thank-you so much for reading......feels wonderful when someone appreciates your work....and yes I will..... :) :)
BTW,I must say you're a Fab writer...your work,who says I am alive was just great beyond words....

Tue, February 10th, 2015 8:25am

Volatile

awww this is really cute!!! I like it a lot :) It is meant for valantines day? I mean, as a Shadowhunter, I will never celebrate Valentive Morgensterns day, but still fantastic!

Tue, February 10th, 2015 9:56pm

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Thankyou....... yes It's meant for Valentine's day....It's a contest entry .....I'm glad you liked it... :)

Tue, February 10th, 2015 8:59pm

Shwetank

Nice.... liked the smoothness of the poem

please have glance on my new poem,lonely she

http://www.booksie.com/poetry/poetry/shwetank/lonely-she

Wed, February 11th, 2015 5:33am

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Thanks for reading....and I'll read it for sure..

Tue, February 10th, 2015 9:35pm

The Ethiopian

That was a great poem dear! There are a few unnecessary comas here and there, though. Besides that, I love the way you expressed your love and longing for this person. Keep writing!

Wed, February 11th, 2015 2:40pm

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thanks....the commas are the result of autocorrect....i should have checked them....ill take care next time....thanks again for reading...lucks :)

Wed, February 11th, 2015 7:53am

Yulia

WOW,WOW,WOW.......
Very nice,i liked it and i really enjoyed reading it as well.It was so romantic and very emotional.
Your words and how you put them all together and the descriptions were marvelous.Now this kind of poems i do enjoy when it is written well and described well.
You've done amazing work dear:)...Keep writing and i wish you all the best ;)and of course i will give it a LIKE,without doubt!!..
*Yulia*

Thu, February 12th, 2015 2:56pm

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Awwee.thank you so so so much..
*smiling smiling and smiling wide*..
Your comment made me feel so good.
I'm glad you liked it...lucks to you too dear...

Thu, February 12th, 2015 7:14am

suchismita Mishra

I could actually picturize these lines. A writing that does this doesn't need any other comment. It's just simply tooo good!

Fri, February 13th, 2015 7:24am

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Thanks for reading dear.....and thankyou for such a sweet comment.. lucks ! :)

Fri, February 13th, 2015 12:16am

BriannasBooks

Aww this is so sweet :) I loved the idea for this, and the ending line was just perfect. What a wonderful poem for Valentine's Day! Thank you for the invite, and keep up the good work! :D

Sat, February 14th, 2015 4:31pm

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And thank you for reading :) glad you liked it...loads of luck to you too :) :)

Sat, February 14th, 2015 8:39am