'Domino'

Poem by: Richmaggs

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Unrequited love ...

Domino

Come and meet Domino, a sad, lonely wretch,

Whose life has traced doom from his first childhood sketch

Of his princess, her glass slipper that fate wouldn’t fit,

So he forced her foot in and then ignored it.

Eluded by his stagecoach, in a pumpkin he sits,

Will dear desperate Domino ever play his double six?

Domino regards the table as he looks for his match,

The eternal voyeur, will he ever cease this watch

With his eyes always yearning, desperate and forlorn,

A presence so singular, a man who was born

With the mask of a fool from the jester he borrowed,

His gaze always wistful and tainted with sorrow.

Dear, dear Domino, head tilted to oneside,

You mourn at the floor and then moon at the sky.

Another circle of play and it’s your turn again,

Will your knuckle hit the wood, will you knock again?

Your dots do not fit, is there something amiss?

Your tile screams eleven- just a five and a six.

You’re missing the dot to take your princess to task,

Perhaps there’s more truth lurking behind your grinning mask …

If you choose her, you’ll lose her,

If you pick him, you’ll reject him.

Do you know what you want, do you know what you are?

Are you scared of your face, your mask never far

Away from your truth that you’ve always suspected,

But fearful of fallout - this domino’s affected.

You’re the King’s courtyard fool acting your merry dance,

Just wanting to give love - and be loved back just once.

Who is your match, will they come in your turn?

Or will your heart forever ache and your soul always burn

For a spirit, your foil, will you ever be united

Or is your romantic destiny to remain unrequited.

****?

Submitted: January 29, 2012

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bobthebuilder

Clever analogy and wording, with careful attention to rhythm and rhyme all make this a nicely flowing poem that tells a sad tale of looking for love. Well done.

Sun, January 29th, 2012 7:59am

katiem2222

Very intriguing poem. Very well written

Sun, January 29th, 2012 8:41am

eamonnsadler

Clever Rich. I'm working on my poetry and reading stuff like this really helps. Thanks.

Sun, January 29th, 2012 10:09am

meriddle

Your poetry (all of it) is a joy to read. I consider you a 'true' poet. I wish I could craft poetry like yours. Every time I try I lose sight of the message. You seem to have a grasp of this talent. My stuff is more 'free verse', that is to say, not well constructed. This particular poem is a jem. It is a poem, a story and a visual image seen differently with each read.
Keep up the good work, Rich.
Mike

Sun, January 29th, 2012 2:57pm

sherry1

Oh wow, this was perfect! Very well done. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one. :) Sherry

Sun, January 29th, 2012 3:58pm

Wilbur

Much smoother ride, Richmaggs. Your words express such sorrow and such sweetness in this song that you are singing. Along with a portrait of the Domino we all know, who hides in all of our hearts at one time or another. Poignant.
Kindest regards, Wilbur

Sun, January 29th, 2012 8:05pm

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thanks Wiilbur!!

Mon, January 30th, 2012 6:52am

Kestas23

Great work. While reading you can imagine yourself as one hiding in darkness fearing the loss and wearing the mask.

Sun, January 29th, 2012 10:50pm

Ian Dawn

Damn I agree with Foxy its a poem packed to the rafters with all sorts of analogies and word play more than 1 read required here. The first one didnt register

Mon, January 30th, 2012 12:50am

ruthi

Wow!! That was awesome, I love the way you did that. Domino, oh my such a good choice, so metaphoric. You are amazing.. Keep up the good work..

Ruthie

Mon, January 30th, 2012 1:27am

divyansh

great work....
enjoyed every bit of it and the rhyme and flow was really well...
DIV

Mon, January 30th, 2012 4:39am

Shadows of Memories

Its too good Rich as usual. And no comments about your rhyming skill with all its meaning and story fit properly. I appreciate that I keep a good poet friend like you in my list. :)keep smiling and keep writing

Mon, January 30th, 2012 5:48am

ashi17

Very professional, well matured, perfectly executed work. Good going, keep writting and amazing your readers. :)

Mon, January 30th, 2012 10:17am

Wisewords

Gorgeous use of words Richard, with a depth of meaning
that many will fail to understand. A job well done and I congratulate you.
No, I have never been a smoker, my words are merely
intended to warn those who do happen to smoke, and how
it might all end....Blessings.

Mon, January 30th, 2012 10:18am

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Thanks Wise, your appreciation is much appreciated!

Mon, January 30th, 2012 6:50am

Darklady

Excellent poem!! I know the pain he feels...sometimes we all hide behind a mask, afraid of showing the true oneself... it is sad indeed... It's a great poem cheers

Mon, January 30th, 2012 1:53pm

Elton Camp

This is an interesting analogy. I'd never have been able to come up with something like this. Good job! I noticed one typo: "You're dots do not fit" should, as you doublesss know, read "Your." I make them all the tiime in my own writing. It's hard to proof one's own work as we tend to see what we meant rather than what's there. Thanks for sharing your write.

Elton

Mon, January 30th, 2012 2:05pm

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ahh, many thanks Elton!

Mon, January 30th, 2012 6:49am